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Monday, February 20, 2012

War of Shadows / 1st Campaigner Challenge 2012


Today is the First Campaigner Challenge of Rachael Harrie’s Fourth Platform Building Campaign!

The challenge is to write a short story / flash fiction in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count.

For an additional (optional) challenge:

·         End the story with the words: “everything faded.” (also included in word count)
·         Include the word “orange” in the story
·         Write in the same genre you normally write
·         Make your story 200 words exactly!
  
 So here is my 200 word count short story. Enjoy!


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War of Shadows

Shadows crept across the wall of the forest leaving only darkness. I glanced over my shoulder as I ran, but didn’t dare look for long, otherwise I would be lost in the horrid beauty of it. Blackness so complete, absorbed every stream of light in its wake. There was nothing to do but run.

With a voracious appetite, it swallowed the vivid green of the leaves and the swirling colors of the wild flowers. Even the heels of my feet chilled as the shadows played with the bare soles of my feet.

Running was useless, but if the orange glow above the canopy of trees refused to give in, then I refused as well. The blazing sun was oblivious that its end was near, that the shadows had won.

I ran even faster and jumped over fallen limbs and moss covered rocks willing myself to make the last few steps to the forest’s edge. But the chills danced up my spine and took hold, refusing to play anymore. I fell to the ground with my eyes on the distant glow and watched as the blazing red tendrils of the sun gave in. Within seconds it was over and everything faded.

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If you liked it enough to vote, please "like" me by clicking HERE. (this is a direct link, only click once because this page will stay the same)

To go to the Linky List page and view all of the votes and entries, please go HERE. (I'm #33)


©Alynza Smith 2011





48 comments:

  1. I love your writing style. This is great entry.

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    1. Thanks Jamie! I wasn't so sure on this one.

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  2. Ooh I loved it!! You had wonderful imagery!! And I absolutely LOVED the line, "With a voracious appetite, it swallowed the vivid green of the leaves and the swirling colors of the wild flowers."

    Great job!

    I'm entry #19

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    1. Thanks Jess! I'm off to go do some blog hopping! I'll be sure to pop over on yours too. :)

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  3. Wow... I loved the line about the voracious appetite swallowing the vivid colors, that is some great imagery! :)

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  4. Beautiful writing! I'm glad you posted this, I forgot this started today! I love the description of even the character's heels being chilled by shadows.

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  5. Beautiful description. I love the "blazing red tendrils of the sun". Great entry! :)

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  6. That picture is gorgeous. And your writing, every bit as comparable.

    Nice one! :)

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  7. Wonderful imagery! I loved it. :) Voting for you!

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  8. Very atmospheric, and I can't help feeling there is something very sinister going on... "fallen limbs" could be branches or arms and legs. At least to me anyway. Love it!

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  9. Wow, great imagery. I really loved the descriptions.. very polished and professional. Really, really good writing.

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    1. Thank you! I'm feeling quite humbled. :)

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  10. Beautiful imagery! I loved the part "With a voracious appetite, it swallowed the vivid green of the leaves and the swirling colors of the wild flowers. Even the heels of my feet chilled as the shadows played with the bare soles of my feet." Nice work! :) You have my vote!

    I'm #37

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  11. You paint a beautiful image with this piece. Excellent job using your 200 words! I really enjoyed it. Oh, and I've tagged you on blog. :D

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  12. Hey there! New campaigner here finally making the rounds.

    I'd have to agree with most of the others that your imagery is beautiful. Very nicely done.

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  13. Beautiful wording, especially the ending...gave me the good kind of shivers :)

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  14. Your description was beautiful and the image really suited the whole mood of the story. Great job!

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  15. Very visual and wonderfully done! :)

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  16. They were so close! Nice job. Mine is # 71

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  17. Nice descriptions! I love the pic you chose, too.

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  18. I agree! This was very well described, and you used wonderful language! Great job!

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  19. My favorite so far...AMAZING...voting.

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  20. That was really good. The title gave me the idea and your story blossomed into the progression of how. Plus you had great descriptions.
    Thanks for your encouraging words on my blog, it meant a lot. I'm voting for you though because I like your style of writing.

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  21. Aloha Alynza,

    I'm a new follower for two, no three reasons.

    Thanks for commenting on my Word Verification post:)

    Thanks for sharing such an awesome story - more please (holds out bowl)

    And, you have the coolest name - evah :) Kudos to your parents for coming up with such a unique name :)

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  22. This is gorgeous. And the picture is a nice complement to the story.

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  23. Lovely imagery and great tension. Voting!

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  24. I felt like I was running with them! Nice job!

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  25. Very nicely written! I could picture the whole scene. You used the words and phrases listed above so well, it didn't even feel like this was written from a prompt. :)

    New follower here, nice to meet you!

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  26. You have great imagery, and you put it into words well!

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  27. Loved it! Great Job!

    I'm number 125

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  28. I love the role you gave the sun in this.

    #109

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  29. Really great description! I felt I was running with her.

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  30. Great imagery! Going to vote...

    Melissa Maygrove
    Campaign Entry #149

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  31. Loved your story. A chilling tale. ha ha..

    You've been tagged by me, Clarbojahn.

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  32. I appreciate the fact that your story is suspenseful, without being "dark"...hard to find these days. Good job! I'm from the campaign, #174. Stop by if you get the chance. I'm 'liking' your story...

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  33. Wow, love the vivid sense of place you've created here. Nicely done!

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